Hi Yoel,
I just had a chance to revisit your improved site. Definitely a step above the previous version! I think you're using the right approach here. A good first effort.
But I think you can improve this version further! Don't get discouraged! You're on the right track here -- it would be great if you fine-tuned this content even more.
I'm going to help you out a bit so you understand what I mean. Let me give you some revised examples, starting with the beginning of your home page...
The Easy Referencer allows you to manage and track your sales quotations by using a unique file naming convention.
This message essentially answers the question of "What is Easy Referencer?" The explanation you provided here is simple and to the point. However, when I read it, the following questions immediately come to mind:
-- Can Easy Referencer be used for other purposes in addition to quotations?
-- What other purposes/areas (if any) can it be used for?
I know you address these questions at the bottom of your home page, but you might also want to address it briefly in this section as well, so that non-sales people won't run away from your site thinking the product is of no use to them.
Okay, moving on to the next section:
How does it work?
The Easy Referencer uses a file naming convention that integrates readable and easy to remember identifiers such as the recipient, the sender, and date of the quotation. You will be able to understand the content of the file without the need to open the quotation document.
I like your explanation of how it works. Here's how I changed it a bit to make your message sound even more powerful:
The Easy Referencer uses a unique file naming convention that integrates standard identifiers, such as "Recipient", "Sender", and "Date of Quotation", into an easy-to-remember and readable format. Because The Easy Referencer allows you to quickly identify the content of any quotation document, you no longer need to open a customer file to search for that information -- saving you valuable time!
Notice above how I transformed your message into a slightly more marketable one that people can relate to better? All I did here was to take your words and give them a little bit of a marketing spin.
Using this same approach, let's move on to your benefits section:
What are the benefits using The Easy Referencer?
* Saves time. No need to search for your previous quotation number. The server keeps track of it and will generate a new unique number based on your information.
* Saves even more time because standard naming convention means quick finding with tools like Google desktop or windows search feature.
* Finding information about your previous quotations is fast and easy as all information is stored on the server database.
* Internet-based solution meaning that you can access from everywhere. This is convenient for sales people who are often on the road.
I like your list of benefits and use of bullets here. I modified the benefits to make them sound a little more catchy:
What are the benefits of using The Easy Referencer?
* Save time. No need to search for your previous quotation number. Our server keeps track of it for you, and provides you with a new unique number based on your information.
* Immediate access to customer data. With Easy Referencer's standard naming convention, information about your customers is available at your fingertips. Find information quickly, using any search tool such as Google Desktop or the search feature in Windows.
* Safe storage of all your information. Retrieve your previous quotations easily, without ever worrying about losing data. Your information is stored securely on our database server.
* Web-based solution with no software to install. As a hosted solution, Easy Referencer can be accessed securely from any computer located anywhere in the world. This is especially convenient for busy salespeople and professionals who are often on the go.
* Completely free to use!
And finally, let's look at your last section:
Is it limited to Quotations management only?
No. You can use The Easy Referencer to generate your file naming convention, used as your references, for all type of documents as well as correspondence.
I tweaked your message here too, to make it more universal and to showcase the multiple uses of The Easy Referencer (feel free to modify my list below):
Is Easy Referencer limited to Quotations management only?
No! Easy Referencer can be used to create file-naming conventions for any type of document, allowing you to easily reference, manage and track virtually any kind of data. You can use The Easy Referencer for such things as:
* Business documents:
- business plans
- annual reports
- communication plans, etc...
* Technical documents:
- training documents
- user guides/manuals
- product data sheets
- system requirements analyses, etc...
* Marketing documents:
- marketing copy
- newsletters and brochures
- contract proposals
- request for proposals (RFPs), etc...
* Correspondence:
- e-mail messages
- fax documents, etc...
You're welcome to use the new copy as you wish on your site.
Hope you found this feedback helpful!
Yann